Isu Magan Book One

We have been brought up on myths and legends. But, what is myth? What is legend? The wars and loves of the gods were fed to us with our mother’s milk. Everything around us could be explained by the acts of the gods and the whims of goddesses. But how do legends start? How does a myth begin?
Our traditional narratives tell how the world began, though we are but relative newcomers in this land. Our legends are remarkable and the feats in them impossible for the lesser men of our day. But now our myths have been explained away and our legends have lost their enchantment. The Counsellor has decreed that all “stories” are to be set aside and only remembered on our Feast Days as a special entertainment.
No more must we think of Sonen’s blessing, unless it be on Thaw Day. No more must we remember Deyja’s curse turning peaceful death into a dark nightmare. We must think of our old tales as imaginary, explaining natural and social phenomena. The Counsellor mocks our fictitious songs, calling them “widely held but false notions”.
Why do we hear no outcry? Because the gods have forsaken us. We cannot trust them any more, not after what they have done…
I’m looking for feedback on these opening paragraphs… Do you want to read more? If you were to buy the book, what format would you purchase? What do you think happens in the story?
© Freya Pickard 2016
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13 Comments on “Isu Magan Book One”

  1. Bruce Says:

    I love this Freya. It is deep and richly lyric. I don’t want to know what happens, I want to experience the journey on my Kindle.

    • thank you for your feedback – v pleased you find it deep and richly lyric! shame you don’t want to find out more, but if I make it available on Kindle (at some point in the near future) will you read it?!!!! xxx

  2. Bruce Says:

    I love this Freya it is deep and rich. I don’t know where it’s going and I don’t want to know, I want to experience the journey on my Kindle. Thanks for your beautiful mind.

  3. Jennifer G. Knoblock Says:

    I would read more! I’m always fascinated by myths, and the tone of this is perfect for a high fantasy tale.

  4. julespaige Says:

    Most faiths seem to fail fragile human thought.

  5. Libby Says:

    Great opening. I would read more in any format! A tale of the return of the heroes? An allegory of our world?

    • thank you, Libby! v encouraged that you would read more in any format! return of heroes – yes, that’s part of the story… oh, I hadn’t thought about it being an allegory of our world – perhaps it is!

  6. Frank Says:

    Feels too abstract to me. If you have a mythology, why not weave a part of it into the opening?

    • thank you, Frank! will bear in mind you found it too abstract. I only wanted to give the first 200 words (I’ve found no one reads much further) so it’s hard to indicate what comes next – interesting feedback tho!

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